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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of businesses in the UK who had a social media presence from 2012 to 2016.

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of businesses in the UK who had a social media presence from 2012 to 2016. GlaRL
The given bar chart displays information about the businesses which made appearance through social network sites in England over the period of 4 years. A quick look is enough to see that the mightiest entrepreneurships had used the online sites mostly among others throughout the given time. It is clearly seen that small corporates made the least use of social media platforms which was almost same in the 2012, 2013 and 2015( 30%). However, in 2016 this percentage raised by 20% and became 50% and this was the highest presence time for small businesses. Furthermore, the appearance time for mediterate entrepreneurships was similar as small businesses (30%) for 2012 and 2014. In addition to this, during two consective years 2013 and 2014 medium businesses made around 49% presence by social media which was slightly lower than the 2016 (51%). In case of huge business, these had nearly equivalent appearance period (79%) in the given years except 2015(50%).
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