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The bar chart illustrates the nation’s export data in several categories during 2015 and 2016. Value in billion dollars and change of percentage is given in the chart.

The bar chart illustrates the nation’s export data in several categories during 2015 and 2016. Value in billion dollars and change of percentage is given in the chart. qYDE
The bar chart illustrates the nation’s export data in several categories during 2015 and 2016. Value in billion dollars and change of percentage is given in the chart. Overall, It can be seen that petroleum products and Engineered goods were the most exported commodities in both years, and percentage had increased in the last year, whereas textiles category had the lowest export among all other categories. Now turning to the details, In 2015 Petroleum products were exported at over 60 billion, which rose 3% in 2016. Also, engineered goods were at below 60 billion in 2015 which increased by 8. 5% in the last year. On the other hand, the export value of textiles was above 25 billion in the initial year, which increased significantly to 15. 24% in the last year. Moreover, a slight decrease was noticed in the export of Gems and jewellery, between 2015 to 2016 about 5. 18%. Export of agricultural products was increased slightly about 0. 81% between the initial year and last year.
The bar chart illustrates the nation’s
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export
data in several categories during 2015 and 2016. Value in
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billion
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change
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Overall
, It can be
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seen
that petroleum products and Engineered
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goods
were the most exported commodities in both years, and percentage had
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increased
in the last
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year
, whereas textiles category had the lowest
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export
among all other categories.

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Now
turning to the
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details
, In 2015 Petroleum products
were exported
at over 60
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billion
, which rose 3% in 2016.
Also
, engineered
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goods
were at below 60
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billion
in 2015 which
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increased
by 8. 5% in the last
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year
.
On the other hand
, the
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export
value of textiles was above 25
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billion
in the initial
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year
, which
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increased
significantly
to 15. 24% in the
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last year
.

Moreover
, a slight decrease
was noticed
in the
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export
of Gems and
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jewellery
,
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between 2015 to 2016
about 5. 18%.
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Export
of agricultural products was
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increased
slightly
about 0. 81% between the initial
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year
and last
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year
.

IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the nation’s export data in several categories during 2015 and 2016. Value in billion dollars and change of percentage is given in the chart.

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