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The bar chart illustrates the information about several of males and females research linguistics, psychology, natural science, engineering, programming, mathematics, computer science subjects at a united state in 2011. It is depicted by regarded bar chart.

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To sum up, it can be vividly manifested that the highest number of subjects learn by learners which were natural science while others followed by opposite trend. Analyzing the data about in which subject pupils were most fascinated it was defined by one research mathematics subject read by males which were 200. Whereas, there was a sharp decline noticed learned by females closely58 than a dramatic rose seen learned by women exactly 150. Moreover, engineering subjects were read by ladies about 98, and there was a dramatic surged up observed in men learners there had been comprised expect 150. Analyzing the rest of the data natural science subjects adopt by both genders which were 200. Furthermore, psychology learned by men's mostly 200 and minor went down noticed in female learners it was above 150. Therefore the linguistic subject read by males nearly 58 while, linguistics subject chosen by the female which was approximately 130.
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