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The supplied line graph illustrates the amount of products that Australian exports as proportions to four different countries over the course of 22 years.

The supplied line graph illustrates the amount of products that Australian exports as proportions to four different countries over the course of 22 years. NMK9W
The supplied line graph illustrates the amount of products that Australian exports as proportions to four different countries over the course of 22 years. Overall, it is noticeable that the export rates of Australian to China and India showed a significant rise over the period, while the percentage of Australian exports to Japan and the USA experienced a downward trend. Looking at the details, at the beginning of the period, the export rates of Australia to China was just about 2, 5% Then it had a dramatically increase in the next 17 years and reached its peak of approximately 30% in 2012. In the meantime, the percentage of products which are exported to India in 2012 was 5% which climbed by fivefold in comparison with this figure in 1990. In the year of 1990 the import rates of Japan was the highest among these four countries with more than 25%. However, it significantly declined to 17% at the end of the period. Whereas, the US had some fluctuations in the import of Australian products as this figure initially accounted for about 11% and eventually end up with 15%.
The supplied line graph illustrates the amount of products that Australian
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as proportions to four
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different
countries over the course of 22 years.

Overall
, it is noticeable that the
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export
rates of Australian to China and India
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showed
a significant rise over the period, while the percentage of Australian
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exports
to Japan and the USA experienced a downward trend.

Looking at the
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details
, at the beginning of the period, the
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export
rates of Australia to China was
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about 2, 5% Then it had a
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dramatically increase
in the
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17 years and reached its peak of approximately 30% in 2012. In the meantime, the percentage of products which
are exported
to India in 2012 was 5% which climbed by fivefold
in comparison
with this figure in 1990.

In the year of 1990 the import rates of Japan was the highest among these four countries with more than 25%.
However
, it
significantly
declined to 17% at the
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end
of the period. Whereas, the US had
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fluctuations in the import of Australian products as this figure
initially
accounted for about 11% and
eventually
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end
up with 15%.

IELTS academic The supplied line graph illustrates the amount of products that Australian exports as proportions to four different countries over the course of 22 years.

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