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The bar chart explains various mode of transportation used by children for their school trip.

The bar chart explains various mode of transportation used by children for their school trip. KwOl9
The bar chart elucidates data regarding school children' up and down travel to school by using 5 different mode of transportation in 1990 and 2010 in a country. At a cursory glance, preference of mode of transport was varied throughout the given period of time. in 1990, walking was the most popular mode of transportation at 12 million trip, however, the figure was plummeted to exactly half and reached to 6 million trips In the second position bus was stood at nearly 7 million times students used this. In 2010, use of car witnessed a sharp upward trend from just 4 million to nearly 11, almost three times increase in the given period. The popularity of bus, cycling walking and bus trips were remained between 6 and 7 million, which saw a down ward trend, in 2010. cycling had declined by 4 million from 6 to 2 million trip, where as, waling and bus was limited to almost half from 6 to 3 million trips.
The bar chart elucidates data regarding school children' up and down travel to school by using 5
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mode
of transportation in 1990 and 2010 in a country.

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was varied
throughout the
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given
period of time.

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in
1990, walking was the most popular mode of transportation at 12
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million
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trip
,
however
, the figure
was plummeted
to exactly half and reached to 6
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million
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trips
In the second position bus
was stood
at
nearly
7
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million
times students
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used
this. In 2010,
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use
of car witnessed a sharp upward trend from
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just
4
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million
to
nearly
11, almost three times increase in the
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given
period.

The popularity of bus, cycling walking and bus
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trips
were remained
between 6 and 7
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million
, which
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saw
a down ward trend, in 2010.
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cycling
had declined by 4
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million
from 6 to 2
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million
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trip
,
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where as
, waling and bus
was limited
to almost half from 6 to 3
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million
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trips
.
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IELTS academic The bar chart explains various mode of transportation used by children for their school trip.

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4 paragraphs
165 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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