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The bar chart exhibits the number of people who attended theater, sporting events and concerts at Grandville Stadium during 2017.

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The bar chart exhibits the number of people who attended theater, sporting events and concerts at Grandville Stadium during 2017. Considering an improvement project which will be develop during 2019, these figures are forecast to 2020 and 2030. At first glance, it can be seen that during 2017, the most popular events were the sporting ones with a little below 150. 000 people and it is projected that this numbers slightly increase to over 150. 000 people in 2020 and to almost 160. 000 people in 2030. Regarging concerts, the attendance number during 2017 was approximately 25. 000 people and is forecast to rise around 40. 000 people when the project have been done. Futhermore, it is expected a considerable increase until almost 200. 000 people through 2030. Finally, it is possible to observe that theater was the less popular event during 2017 with less than 10. 000 people and it is projected that it will not rise more that 50. 000 people by 2030.
The bar chart exhibits the number of
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who attended theater, sporting
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events
and concerts at
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Grandville
Stadium during 2017. Considering an improvement project which will be
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develop
during 2019, these figures are forecast to 2020 and 2030.

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first
glance, it can be
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seen
that during 2017, the most popular
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events
were the sporting ones with a
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little
below 150. 000
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people
and it
is projected
that this numbers
slightly
increase to over 150. 000
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people
in 2020 and to almost 160.
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000
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people
in 2030.

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Regarging
concerts, the attendance number during 2017 was approximately 25. 000
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people
and is forecast to rise around 40. 000
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people
when the project have
been done
.
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Futhermore
, it is
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expected
a considerable increase until almost 200. 000
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people
through 2030.

Finally
, it is possible to observe that theater was the less popular
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event
during 2017 with less than 10. 000
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people
and it
is projected
that it will not rise more that 50. 000
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people
by 2030.
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