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The line chart depicts fish, beef, lamb and fish consumption in a country which located in Europe between 1979 and 2004.

The line chart depicts fish, beef, lamb and fish consumption in a country which located in Europe between 1979 and 2004. KW8Qk
The line chart depicts fish, beef, lamb and fish consumption in a country which located in Europe between 1979 and 2004. Overall, chicken consumption is dramatically increased between 1979 and 2004. Both beef and Lamp preferences has been a decrease in the same years. In contrast, the last line is Fish which shows a stability between 1979 and 2004. It is clearly evident that chicken consumption is the greatest compare to other foods which is 250 grams per person per week in 2004. In contrast, Fish is consumed by people is around 50 grams which the lowest in 1979 and 2004. Consumption of beef is almost 100 grams in 2004. While eating of lamps was 60 grams per week in the same county. In 1979, beef consumption is the highest which is around 230 grams. Both Lamb and Beef consumption is similar to each other which is around 150- 140 grams. In conclusion, people were more likely to consume beef in old years however; they prefer consuming chicken nowadays.
The line chart depicts fish,
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beef
, lamb and fish
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consumption
in a country which located in Europe between 1979 and 2004.

Overall
, chicken
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consumption
is
dramatically
increased between 1979 and 2004. Both
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beef
and Lamp preferences has been a decrease in the same years.
In contrast
, the last line is Fish which
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shows
a stability between 1979 and 2004.

It is
clearly
evident that chicken
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consumption
is the greatest compare to other foods which is 250
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grams
per person per week in 2004.
In contrast
, Fish
is consumed
by
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people
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is
around 50
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grams
which the lowest in 1979 and 2004.
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Consumption
of
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beef
is almost 100
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grams
in 2004.
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While
eating of lamps was 60
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grams
per week in the same county. In 1979,
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beef
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consumption
is the highest which is around 230
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grams
. Both Lamb and
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Beef
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consumption
is similar to each other which is around
Consider using an n-dash (half dash), if you want to indicate numerical ranges or time ranges.
150- 140
grams.

In conclusion
,
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people
were more likely to consume
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beef
in
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old
years
however
; they prefer consuming chicken nowadays.
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IELTS academic The line chart depicts fish, beef, lamb and fish consumption in a country which located in Europe between 1979 and 2004.

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169 words
6.0
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