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The global sales of different types of digital games.

The global sales of different types of digital games. eRWQA
The bar graph illustrates the amount of global sales of different kinds of digital games: Mobile phone games, Online games, Console games and Handheld games in the years between 2000 and 2006. Overall, it is clearly seen that Handheld games was the most popular over the period, while other types of games were played two and three times less than Handheld games during the period. In 2000, the quantity of Handheld games was approximately 11 million dollars, but the amount of Console games stood at just under 6 million dollars. Then, the former began to rising slightly to roughly 16 million from the beginning of the period to 2004, the latter decreased gradually to 2003. By contrast them, other types of games namely Mobile games and Online games were started playing from 2002. In the period of 2004 and 2005, Handheld games stabled for a while, then continued growing and remained as a most popular one. Although, the rate of Console games was equal between 2003 and 2004, went on diclining to the end of the period. In 2004, that was the less popular than others. In terms of other types of games: Mobile and Online games grew steadily to the end of the year, and were about half of Handheld games.
The bar graph illustrates the amount of global sales of
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: Mobile phone
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, Online
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, Console
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and Handheld
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in the years between 2000 and 2006.

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that Handheld
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was the most popular over the
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were played
two and three times less than Handheld
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during the period.

In 2000, the quantity of Handheld
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was approximately 11 million dollars,
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the amount of Console
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stood at
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under 6 million dollars. Then, the former began to rising
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to 2004, the latter decreased
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In the
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of 2004 and 2005, Handheld
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stabled for a while, then continued growing and remained as a most popular one. Although, the rate of Console
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was equal between 2003 and 2004, went on
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. In 2004, that was the less popular than others. In terms of
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: Mobile and Online
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grew
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