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The bar chart depicts the information that people of USA ate packaged food at various time in three year 2003 ,2006 and 2013

The bar chart depicts the information that people of USA ate packaged food at various time in three year 2003, 2006 and 2013 26Nnj
It was apparent from that chart that considerable proportion ate fast food in once a week by USA population in 2003. Moreover, between 2006 and 2013 both once a week or twice a month people ate packaged food near around 30 %. From the close inspection proportion of utilized fast food in every day and they had similar percentage. There was a significant proportion of people who consumed fast food in few times a year in 2006 and 2013. An inspection of the data in chart reveals that people who ate fast food in several times a week amongst three years had proportion under 30 % and a few times in year people consumed packaged food more than fifth 20% respectively. Overall, there was highest figure of once a week and once or twice a month in ate of fast food.
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by USA population in 2003.
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, between 2006 and 2013 both
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people
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packaged
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near around 30 %. From the close inspection
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of utilized
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in every
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they had similar percentage. There was a significant
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in few times a year in 2006 and 2013. An inspection of the data in chart reveals that
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who
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in several times a
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amongst three years had
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under 30 % and a few times in year
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people
consumed packaged
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more than fifth 20%
respectively
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Overall
, there was
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IELTS academic The bar chart depicts the information that people of USA ate packaged food at various time in three year 2003, 2006 and 2013

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  American English
1 paragraphs
141 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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