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Production of pears as canned fruits

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The assigned diagram Highlights the production of canned pears. There are 14 steps involved from picking through hands to dispatching in the market At a fleeting glance, it is immensely clear that, the fruits are picked by hand and transport through trucks. After that, they are washed properly and are tested for quality. The fruits that passes the quality control are stored and graded according to their weight. Further scrutininsing the chart, the graded pears are peeled off for slicing. The pears are later canned and sealed property. In the Wake of this step, the canned pears are heated for Cooking and labelled before they are stored in the penultimate step and dispatched in the market for sale Overall, it is lucca that it is a complex process. All the steps are mandatory to be followed, if any of the step is missed, the process will come to halt.

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steps
 involved from picking through hands to dispatching in the market At a fleeting glance, it is immensely
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clear
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 by hand and transport through trucks. After that, they are washed
properly
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tested
 for quality. The fruits that passes the quality control are stored
 and graded according to their weight. Further
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 the chart, the graded pears are peeled
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IELTS academic Production of pears as canned fruits

Academic

American English

1 paragraphs

149 words

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4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

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Lexical Resource: 5.5

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Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.5

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