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The bar chart compares the number of Thailanders joining fitness centers in terms of gender from 1985 to 2015.

The bar chart compares the number of Thailanders joining fitness centers in terms of gender from 1985 to 2015. J3JMk
The bar chart compares the number of Thailanders joining fitness centers in terms of gender from 1985 to 2015. Overall, it can be seen that the year 2010 witnessed the highest fitness membership in both genders. Furthermore, men had a tendency to care much about their bodies compared to women. During a period of 10 years from 1985, it is noticeable that the number of males participating in fitness activities completely overwhelmed female members. More remarkably, in 1990, nearly 4000 men allocated their time to physical activities, which was twice that of women. After 2 decades, despite some changes in other examined years, the male fitness membership in Thailand was significant higher than that of the opposite sex, at 5000 and 3000, respectively. These figures also broke previous recorded to become the highest numbers between 1985 and 2015. In contrast, women tended to spend much time on improving their fitness in 2000-2005. However, the gap between two genders was relatively small, only 1000 people in 2000 and 100 people in the next 5 years. At the end of the period, the female number who took part in fitness centers was double that of male with only 1000 people.
The bar chart compares the
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Thailanders
joining
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fitness
centers in terms of gender from 1985 to 2015.

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seen
that the
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2010 witnessed the highest
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fitness
membership in both genders.
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,
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men
had a tendency to care much about their bodies compared to women.

During a period of 10 years from 1985, it is noticeable that the
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number
of males participating in
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fitness
activities completely overwhelmed female members. More
remarkably
, in 1990,
nearly
4000
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men
allocated their time to physical activities, which was twice that of women. After 2 decades, despite
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changes
in other examined years, the male
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fitness
membership in Thailand was significant higher than that of the opposite sex, at 5000 and 3000,
respectively
. These figures
also
broke previous recorded to become the highest
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numbers
between 1985 and 2015.

In contrast
, women tended to spend much time on improving their
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fitness
in 2000-2005.
However
, the gap between two genders was
relatively
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small
,
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only
1000
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in 2000 and 100
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people
in the
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5 years. At the
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of the period, the female
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took part
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centers was double that of male with
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1000
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