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The graph below gives information around a saturday daily sales of two bakeries in London in 2010. Overal, it is cleaelr that, Bernie's Buns bakery saw huge increases in virtually every revenues, while you can see lovely loaves was ledt far behind from the Burnie's Buns. In 2010 Burnie's Buns sold out 140 kg droughnuts which was the highest amount among all other products. Likewise, droughnuts baked by Lovely Loaves sold out 120 kg. A bit less than 120 kg cookies were sold to customers from Burnie's Buns while the Lovely loaves 65kg were purchased which were 35 kg less than Burnie'a Buns. Also sales of the products of Burnies Buns took the lead in almost all product sales such as cakes which was 105 kg, approximately 25 kg more than Lovely Loaves Interestingly, the common figure was in sales among both bakeries can be seen in the sale of toasted sandwiches which were equal to 23 kg. Furthermore, less than 80 kg rolls were sold from Burnies Buns whilst 45 kg from the Lovely loaves. However, the lowest point was for Lovely loaves was in salad's sales in which there were only about 18 kg though 62 kg salads were sold by Burnies Buns.
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saturday
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sales
of two bakeries in London in 2010.

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Overal
, it is
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cleaelr
that, Bernie's
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Buns
bakery
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saw
huge increases in
virtually
every
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, while you can
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see
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lovely
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loaves
was
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ledt
far behind from the
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Burnie
's Buns.

In 2010
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Burnie
's
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Buns
sold out 140 kg
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droughnuts
which was the highest amount among all other products.
Likewise
,
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droughnuts
baked by
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Lovely
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Loaves
sold out 120 kg. A bit less than 120 kg cookies
were sold
to customers from
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Burnie
's
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Buns
while the
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Lovely
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loaves
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65kg
were
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purchased
which were 35 kg less than
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Burnie
'a
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Also
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of the products of
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Burnies
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took the lead in almost all product
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sales
such as cakes which was 105 kg, approximately 25 kg more than
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Lovely
Loaves

Interestingly
, the common figure was in
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sales
among both bakeries can be
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seen
in the
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sale
of toasted sandwiches which were equal to 23 kg.
Furthermore
, less than 80 kg rolls
were sold
from
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Burnies
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Buns
whilst 45 kg from the
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Lovely
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loaves
.
However
, the lowest point was for
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was in salad's
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in which there were
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only
about 18 kg though 62 kg salads
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