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The bar chart compares and contrasts data on the changes in the proportion of total of the world population, over a course 100 years, starting from 1950.

The bar chart compares and contrasts data on the changes in the proportion of total of the world population, over a course 100 years, starting from 1950. Q5DQy
The bar chart compares and contrasts data on the changes in the proportion of total of the world population, over a course 100 years, starting from 1950. Overall, a closer look at the graph highlights the fact that the population of India witnesses a increase, the opposite is true for that of China, USA and Japan throughout the period shown. Look at the bar chart in detail, the proportion of India began at 15% in 1950 and it is expected to grow gradually to round 19% in 2050 while the figure for China started at 23% in 1950, which is the highest in the period, before being predicted to decline to exactly 15% at the end of the period. Starting at the approximately 3% during the first year of the period, the figures for Japan will drop slowly to 1% in 2050. Besides, the figure for USA started at around 7% in 1950 and then fell marginally to 5% in 2002 and it is predicted remain unchanged at the end of the period.
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in the proportion of total of the world population, over a course 100 years, starting from 1950.

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increase, the opposite is true for that of China, USA and Japan throughout the
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to round 19% in 2050 while the figure for China
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at 23% in 1950, which is the highest in the
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being predicted
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of the period.

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IELTS academic The bar chart compares and contrasts data on the changes in the proportion of total of the world population, over a course 100 years, starting from 1950.

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