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The bar chart shows the global sales of 4 different types of digital games over a period of 6 years.

The bar chart shows the global sales of 4 different types of digital games over a period of 6 years. jbOB1
The bar graph illustrates the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games over a period of 7 years. the highest sales of games were the handled games. In any case, while the selling of online, console and handheld games rose significantly over the time frame, the mobile phone games witnessed a reverse. In 2000, standing approximately at 11 billion, the handheld games were the most popular games, and this was followed by the console games at 6 million. During the following year, handheld games witnessed a dramatic rise to 17 billion, the console games used console declined gradually, to half of the first year sales and became, making it the lowest popular game in over the period in question. Interestingly, the online games emerged in 2001 and contributed around 0. 5 billion to the industry. In the next a year, this increased slightly by 0. 5 billion and had the same figure as online games ( around 1 billion). Both of them, then, remained rising steadily over the following period and the online games turned out to be the second most popular games followed mobile phone in the third position.
The bar graph illustrates the global sales (in
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billions
of dollars) of
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different
types of digital
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games
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over
a period of 7 years.

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the
highest sales of
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games
were the handled
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games
. In any case, while the selling of
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online
,
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console
and handheld
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games
rose
significantly
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over
the time frame, the mobile phone
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games
witnessed a reverse.

In 2000, standing approximately at 11
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billion
, the handheld
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games
were the most popular
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games
, and this
was followed
by the
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console
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games
at 6 million. During the following year, handheld
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games
witnessed a dramatic rise to 17
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billion
, the
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console
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games
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used
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console
declined
gradually
, to half of the
first
year sales and became, making it the lowest popular game in
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over
the period in question.

Interestingly
, the
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online
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games
emerged in 2001 and contributed around 0. 5
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billion
to the industry. In the
next
a year, this increased
slightly
by 0. 5
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billion
and had the same figure as
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online
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games
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(
around 1
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billion)
. Both of them, then, remained rising
steadily
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over
the following period and the
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online
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games
turned out to be the second most popular
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games
followed mobile phone in the third position.
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the global sales of 4 different types of digital games over a period of 6 years.

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