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The bar chart below shows the water consumption by people in north teaxas

The bar chart below shows the water consumption by people in north teaxas ArDd1
The given bar graph illustrate the consumption of water in north texas in billion of gallons starting from 2008-2009 to till 2013 - 14. whereas, pie chart depicts the water treatment for utilisation from august, 2013 to july 2014. Turning to the bar chart the consumption of water has increased to 100 billion of gallons which is highest in the fiscal year 2010 - 2011. However, the figure showed that between 2008-2009 there is only the minimum difference near about 78 percentum. The pie chart further collates that, treated water consumption in the water year 2013 - 2014. The ratio of 83% distributed to the residents of the city and near about 17% to the customer who want to purchase the water bottles. Overall, the water consumption by individuals in north texas is almost equal to the treated water consumption by the city members in the year 2013-2014 august and july 2014. The treated water consumption by consumer is only 17%.
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water
in north
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texas
in
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billion
of gallons starting from 2008-2009 to till
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2013 - 14
.
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treatment for
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utilisation
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august, 2013
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july
2014. Turning to the bar chart the
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has increased to 100 billion of gallons which is highest in the fiscal year
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2010 - 2011
.
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, the figure
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showed
that between 2008-2009 there is
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only
the minimum difference near about 78
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percentum
. The pie chart
further
collates that, treated
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water
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consumption
in the
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water
year
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2013 - 2014
. The ratio of 83% distributed to the residents of the city and near about 17% to the customer who want to
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purchase
the
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bottles.
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consumption
by individuals in north
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texas
is almost equal to the treated
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by the city members in the year 2013-2014 august and
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july
2014. The treated
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the water consumption by people in north teaxas

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