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The pie chart below shows the percentage of time adults spent on different activities.

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The given pie chart depict the information about the proportion of time youngsters utilized on various activities in the notion during 2008 and 2018. After analysing it can be clearly seen that 8% of time was spent by young people on relaxing at home in 2008. However, youngsters utilized double time on same activity in 2018. same time was spent by adults on working in both years. young generation spend 2% of time to travel for work. Whilst, time was escalated by 6% on same activity. The pie chart further collate that there was a difference of 1% time that adults spent to go out with friends. The percentage of time on sleeping was 32% and 20% in 2008 and 2018 respectively. The ratio of time on playing sports by youth was 6% in former year an In later it was declined by 4%. overall, maximum percentum of time was in working, whereas there was minimum percentage of time on playing sports.
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clearly
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was spent
by young
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on relaxing at home in 2008.
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, youngsters utilized double
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time
on same activity in 2018.
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same
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time
was spent
by adults on working in both years.
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young
generation spend 2% of
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time
to travel for work. Whilst,
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time
was escalated
by 6% on same activity. The pie chart
further
collate that there was a difference of 1%
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time
that adults spent to go out with friends. The percentage of
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time
on sleeping was 32% and 20% in 2008 and 2018
respectively
.
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The
ratio of
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on playing sports by youth was 6% in former year an In later it
was declined
by 4%.
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overall
, maximum
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of
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was in working, whereas there was minimum percentage of
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on playing sports.
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