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The maps show the developments in a city hospital road access in comparison between 2007 and 2010. There are obvious changes have happened in the mentioned period.

The maps show the developments in a city hospital road access in comparison between 2007 and 2010. There are obvious changes have happened in the mentioned period. gqa33
According to what is shown in the graphs, in 2007, there is only one car park which contains all staff and public cars and busses. This car park was located in both sides of Hospital Road. In contrast, in 2010 the City Hospital faced obvious development in road access. Every category (public, staff, and buses) has private location for their vehicles park. First, public cars park has established on the east of City Hospital. Then, Staff car park has located on the east of Hospital Road. Finally, a bus station on the west side of Hospital Road. In addition there were two roundabout in order to ease the transportation movement. Overall, it was clear from the maps given that several expanded have occurred in City Hospital Road access in 2010 compared with its situation in 2007.
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which contains all staff and public
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cars
and busses. This
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car
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park
was located
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Hospital
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.
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, in 2010 the City
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Hospital
faced obvious development in
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access. Every category (public, staff, and buses) has private location for their vehicles
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park
.
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, public
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park
has established on the east of City
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Hospital
. Then, Staff
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car
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park
has located on the east of
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Hospital
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Road
.
Finally
, a bus station on the west side of
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Hospital
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. In
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addition
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ease
the transportation movement.

Overall
, it was
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clear
from the maps
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access in 2010 compared with its situation in 2007.
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IELTS academic The maps show the developments in a city hospital road access in comparison between 2007 and 2010. There are obvious changes have happened in the mentioned period.

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