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the bar chart below shows the top ten countries for production and consumption of electricity in 2014

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The given bar graph illustrats the top ten countries manufacturing and utilization of electricity in 2014. Manufacturing and utilization both are in billions kwh and on vertical line there are 10 all are rank wise. overall it can be seen that rather then 9 countries china has vast production and similar utilization of electricity there is minor diffrence in last six country but usa also manufacturing and utilization not in big ammount as china but in decent amount after usa russia has same amount of manufacturing and utilization. But next seven countries in list donot produce as much as top three. To summarise, it can be stated that this data is not published by any authority and not verifided. It also vary to origanl data.
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both are in billions
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and on vertical line there are 10
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9 countries
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china
has vast production and similar
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in last six country

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in decent amount after
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has same
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