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The bar chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The bar chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. rB7N
The bar chart illustrates the responses from a survey on how often people buy and drink coffee and tea across five cities in Australia. Overall, most residents of the five cities went to a café for coffee or tea in the last 4 weeks and the least percentage of people purchased fresh coffee in the same time frame. It can be seen from the graph that the number of people who patronized the café, was more across the five cities, with Melbourne showing the highest percentage of about 63% and Hobart with almost the same value as Melbourne at 62. 5% and Adelaide having the lowest percentage of about 49% Sydney and Brisbane recorded about 60% and 55% respectively. However, the number of city residents who bought fresh coffee were the least across the five cities. About 44% of people living in Sydney bought fresh coffee and this was the highest percentage across the five cities, while people living in Adelaide and Brisbane purchased the least with about 34%. Instant coffee had better sales than fresh coffee across all five cities and it recorded more patronage in Hobart with about 54% as compared to other cities and was least patronized in Sydney (45%)
The bar chart illustrates the responses from a survey on how
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and tea across five
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in Australia.

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, most residents of the five
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went to a café for
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or tea in the last 4 weeks and the least
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fresh
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coffee
in the same time frame.

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seen
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who patronized the café, was more across the five
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cities
, with Melbourne showing the highest
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of about 63% and Hobart with almost the same value as Melbourne at 62. 5% and Adelaide having the lowest
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of about 49% Sydney and Brisbane recorded about 60% and 55%
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, the number of city residents who
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were the least across the five
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cities
. About 44% of
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people
living in Sydney
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and this was the highest
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across the five
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, while
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living in Adelaide and Brisbane
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the least with about 34%. Instant
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had better sales than
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fresh
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coffee
across all five
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and it recorded more patronage in Hobart with about 54% as compared to other
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and was least patronized in Sydney (45%)
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

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4 paragraphs
202 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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