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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. aP27

The given bar chart shows the comparison of percentage, that gives us information about male and female physical activity in various age. It can be clearly seen that, the majority of males reached the peak between 15 to24 years, while women hit the peak with overwhelmingly result in 45 to 54. As is shown in the illustration, teenagers who aged 15 to 24 touched the highest point with a figure 52. 8%, showing just over a half fraction. Unfortunately, with age it is rapidly declined and in age of 35-44 men touched the lowest point. But in next two categories percentage steadily rose. Now. turning to the details of female index, women showed just under a half fraction, but the most active females were to with a figure 53. 3%, but they provides the less number showing that female less active between 15 to 24 years. In age 65 and over they represented the same number, almost around a half.

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given
 bar chart This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 the comparison of percentage, that gives us information about male and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeminine
female
 physical activity in various age.

It can be clearly
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 that, the majority of males reached the peak between 15 to24 years, while women hit the peak with overwhelmingly
 result in 45 to 54.

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teenagers
 who aged 15 to 24 touched the highest point with a figure 52. 8%, showing This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 over a half fraction. Unfortunately, with age it is rapidly
 declined and in age of 35-44 This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsresidentscitizens
men
 touched the lowest point. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
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 two categories percentage steadily
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Now
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turning
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details
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female
 index, women This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratedportrayedindicateddisplayed
showed
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just
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but
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females
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 years. In age 65 and over they represented the same number, almost around a half. 