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The bar chart below shows the number of miles travelled in a year by men and women for six different purpose in a particular country. Summaries the information be selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The column graph illustrates data about the number of mileage trips made by both genders over the year for six various reasons in a specific country. From the cursory glance, it can be seen that men travelled the highest mileage trip for work. From the bar chart, it can be observed that for work purpose men and women travelled highest miles(about 35, 000 and 30, 000 respectively). In contrast, both the genders were travelled least miles for day trip purpose, which was around 10, 000 miles for men and well under 10, 000 miles for women. In contrast to a day trip, entertainment purpose was a little much popular for travel by men and women, which constitutes around 15, 000 miles for men and approximately 12, 000 miles for women. Furthermore, both genders were travelled almost the same mileage for purpose of taking children to school ( just over 25, 000 miles for men and over 25, 000 miles for women). Meanwhile, for the shopping purpose, women travelled about 30, 000 miles while men travelled under 30, 000 miles. For the last reason for meeting friends, women travelled about 25, 000 miles. In compare to this, men travelled well under 25, 000 miles. Overall, it can be seen from the chart that men travelled the most miles for work purpose while women travelled the most miles for shopping.
The column graph illustrates data about the number of mileage
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made by both genders over the year for six various reasons in a specific country. From the cursory glance, it can be
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seen
that
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men
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the highest mileage
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trip
for work.

From the bar chart, it can
be observed
that for work
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purpose
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men
and
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women
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travelled
highest miles(about 35, 000 and 30, 000
respectively
).
In contrast
, both the genders were
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travelled
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least
miles for day
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trip
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purpose
, which was around 10, 000 miles for
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men
and well under 10, 000 miles for
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women
.
In contrast
to a day
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trip
, entertainment
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purpose
was a
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little
much popular for travel by
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men
and
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women
, which constitutes around 15, 000 miles for
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men
and approximately 12, 000 miles for women.

Furthermore
, both genders were
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travelled
almost the same mileage for
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purpose
of taking children to school
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just
over 25, 000 miles for
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men
and over 25, 000 miles for
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women)
. Meanwhile, for the shopping
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purpose
,
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women
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travelled
about 30, 000 miles while
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men
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travelled
under 30, 000 miles. For the last reason for meeting friends,
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women
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travelled
about 25, 000 miles. In compare to this,
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men
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travelled
well under 25, 000 miles.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
from the chart that
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men
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travelled
the most miles for work
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purpose
while
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women
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travelled
the most miles for shopping.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the number of miles travelled in a year by men and women for six different purpose in a particular country.

Academic
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6.0
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