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The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015.

The figures represent the share of women who participate in top management positions in three companies from 1975 to 2015. Certainly, there had been an increase in the female workforce at the top level of the three companies. Although, Eldan Lt enterprise had the highest involvement of women with 3% in 1975 and 64% in 2015, on the other hand, Finsbury company started in 1975 with 16% with slow growth in the next 40 years having close to one-quarter of management lead by a female. Alternatively, Bamforth Ltd company had a flat involvement of women from 1975 to 2000 with 9% and 17% respectably, nevertheless, in the last 15 years, it had tremendous participation with close to half of directors being female. It appears that women had a bright future taking care of top decisions in the private sector, for example from 2000 to 2015 Eldan and Bamforth include twice the number of women, but the next decade is probably that more than half of managers will be women.
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from 1975 to 2015.

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Lt enterprise had the highest involvement of
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with 3% in 1975 and 64% in 2015,
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Bamforth
Ltd
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had a flat involvement of
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from 1975 to 2000 with 9% and 17%
respectably
,
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, in the last 15 years, it had tremendous participation with close to half of directors being female.

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had a bright future taking care of top decisions in the private sector,
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and
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include twice the number of
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IELTS academic The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015.

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