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The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.

The bar chart shows how five different industries shared Brazil’s economy percentage-wise in the years 2009 and 2019 with a prediction for the year 2029. Overall, finance’s share outraces the other four industries across the aforementioned years. While finance’s rate increased and is predicted to become even higher, an opposite tendency is observed for manufacturing, whereas the other three are characterized by rate fluctuations. Between 2009 and 2019, finance’s percentage increased from slightly above 30% to around 36% respectively, while manufacturing’s rate dropped from almost 20% to about 16%. Meanwhile, the rate of the food processing industry almost doubled between 2009 and 2019, from about 11% to around 21%. In parallel, tourism’s proportion declined from approximately 26% to around 21%, whereas the share of the oil, coal and gas industry enlarged from about 26% to almost 31%. From 2019 to 2029, finance’s share is expected to rise to almost 42% while manufacturing’s is predicted to hit an all-time-low point at 5% precisely. In comparison, the percentage share of the food processing industry is anticipated to drop dramatically from almost 21% to slightly above 10%. Tourism’s share is projected to remain steady while the percentage of oil, coal and gas industry in Brazil’s economy is forecast to drop slightly from about 31% to approximately 26%.
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shared Brazil’s economy percentage-wise in the years 2009 and 2019 with a prediction for the year 2029.

Overall
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finance’s
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outraces the other four
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industries
across the aforementioned years. While
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finance’s
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rate
increased and
is predicted
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is observed
for manufacturing, whereas the other three
are characterized
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fluctuations.

Between 2009 and 2019,
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percentage increased from
slightly
above 30% to around 36%
respectively
, while manufacturing’s
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rate
dropped from
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20% to about 16%. Meanwhile, the
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of the food processing
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industry
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doubled between 2009 and 2019, from about 11% to around 21%. In parallel, tourism’s proportion declined from approximately 26% to around 21%, whereas the
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of the oil, coal and gas
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enlarged from about 26% to
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31%.

From 2019 to 2029,
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finance’s
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is
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42% while manufacturing’s
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.
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of the food processing
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is anticipated
to drop
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21% to
slightly
above 10%. Tourism’s
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share
is projected
to remain steady while the percentage of oil, coal and gas
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industry
in Brazil’s economy is forecast to drop
slightly
from about 31% to approximately 26%.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.

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