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The diagram shows how a type of tent called a tepee is built.

The diagram illustrate how a type of tent called a tepee is built. Overall, beginning with sticks and ropes is constructed a tepee and ending with the canvas is fixed a position. First of all, can be seen from a diagram that sticks is kept by a rope. Secondly, sticks are created a tripod. Next, many sticks is continuously gathered. After that sticks are bound to create one circle. In the fifth stage of diagram, canvas is prepared by two a people. In the next step, sticks are carefully covered by canvas to ensure the durable many sticks. Then, canvas is certainly kept by a metal pins. Finally, the tepee is steadily hold by the bollards and the ropes. In conclusion, tepee is finished by way the best and can be regularly used.
The diagram illustrate how a type of tent called a
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tepee
is built
.
Overall
, beginning with
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sticks
and ropes
is constructed
a
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tepee
and ending with the
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canvas
is
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fixed
a position.
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First of all
, can be
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seen
from a diagram that
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sticks
is
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kept
by a rope.
Secondly
,
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sticks
are created
a tripod.
Next
,
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many
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sticks
is
continuously
gathered.
“After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
that
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sticks
are bound
to create one circle. In the fifth stage of diagram,
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canvas
is prepared
by two a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. In the
next
step,
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sticks
are
carefully
covered by
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canvas
to ensure the durable
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many
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sticks
. Then,
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canvas
is
certainly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
by a metal pins.
Finally
, the
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tepee
is
steadily
hold by the bollards and the ropes.
In conclusion
,
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tepee
is finished
by way the best and can be
regularly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
.

IELTS academic The diagram shows how a type of tent called a tepee is built.

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
133 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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