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The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Bar Chart

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. N7M0
The given bar graph shows the percentage share of Brazil’s economy held by five different industries in the years 2009 and 2019 along with the prediction on 2029. In 2009, finance had the largest share of 30%, followed by tourism and oil coal gas having approximately 26% share. The least amount of share was of food processing with only 10%. Furthermore, in 2019, some changes took place in the statistics, where finance, oil coal gas share increased by almost 5 % each and food processing’s share surprisingly rose up to 21%. However, there was a decline in shares of manufacturing and tourism of 5%. It is predicted that in 2029, shares of all four industries will fall drastically, but finance will keep surging and will touch almost 42% Overall, Finance has the highest share in brazil’s economy in past and in future however manufacturing and food processing will have the lowest shares.
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bar graph
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shows
the percentage
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share
of Brazil’s economy held by five
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different
industries in the years 2009 and 2019 along with the prediction on 2029.

In 2009,
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finance
had the largest
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share
of 30%, followed by tourism and oil coal gas having approximately 26%
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share
. The least amount of
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share
was of food processing with
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only
10%.

Furthermore
, in 2019,
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some
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changes
took place in the statistics, where
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finance
, oil coal gas
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share
increased by almost 5 % each and food processing’s
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share
surprisingly
rose up to 21%.
However
, there was a decline in
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shares
of manufacturing and tourism of 5%.

It
is predicted
that in 2029,
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shares
of all four industries will fall
drastically
,
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but
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finance
will
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keep
surging and will touch almost 42%

Overall
,
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Finance
has the highest
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share
in
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brazil
’s economy in past and in future
however
manufacturing and food processing will have the lowest
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shares
.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
152 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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