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The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening. ) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see. a5V9
This diagram illustrates information about the amount of time spent on non-salary work weekly that has done separated by gender. From a first glance, the graph points out that married women spend their time on unpaid duty more than married men. Also, the graph tells that the more children she has, the more time women lose their time as labor without payment. On the contrary, married men become freer when they have more children. Finally, He must stay focus on this activity approximately 30 hours less than their spouse while the difference between him and his partner is only probably 15 hours used when they live without children. Therefore, by the pattern present on the diagram, women utilize her time doing duty without receiving interest more than her husband whether they are an only couple or have they incest to look after.
This diagram illustrates information about the amount of
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time
spent on non-salary work weekly that has done separated by gender.

From a
first
glance, the graph points out that married women spend their
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time
on unpaid duty more than married
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men
.
Also
, the graph
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tells
that the more children she has, the more
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time
women lose their
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time
as labor without payment.

On the contrary
, married
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men
become freer when they have more children.
Finally
, He
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must
stay focus on this activity approximately 30 hours less than their spouse while the difference between him and his partner is
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only
probably
15 hours
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used
when they
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live
without children.

Therefore
, by the pattern present on the diagram, women utilize her
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time
doing duty without receiving interest more than her husband whether they are an
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only
couple or have
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they incest
to look after.

IELTS academic The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening. ) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

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