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The bar char show the percentage of men and female working hours per week.

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The bar chart illustrates the information about the average number of hours worked by two genders per week. Overall, it can be seen that women aged from 35 to 64 work longer hours among other age groups, while men show that the younger generation spends most of their work time compared to elderly people per week. According to the bar chart, the majority of men aged from 15 to 24 perform more regular physical activity rather than females at the same age, males and females accounting for 58. 9 and 47. 7 respectively. In contrast, the figure of working hours by females aged from 45 to 54 engaged a greater physical activity with 53. 3%, while men category showed a noticeable interest in doing a regular physical activity which made up 43. 1. Men show a considerable fall in interest in physical performance by the age of 25 to 44, accounting for only 42. 2 and 39. 5 percent. On the other hand, females participating in physical exercises increase from 25 to 64, with values rising from 48. 9 to 53 percent. The rate of participation of females and males represents no significant difference and consume almost the same percentage, with about 46. 7 and 47. 1 respectively.
The bar chart illustrates the information about the average number of hours worked by two genders per week.
Overall
, it can be
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seen
that women aged from 35 to 64 work longer hours among other age groups, while
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men
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show
that the younger generation spends most of their work time compared to elderly
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people
per week.

According to the bar chart, the majority of
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men
aged from 15 to 24 perform more regular
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physical
activity
rather
than
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females
at the same age, males and
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females
accounting for 58. 9 and 47. 7
respectively
.
In contrast
, the figure of working hours by
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females
aged from 45 to 54 engaged a greater
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physical
activity with 53. 3%, while
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men
category
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showed
a noticeable interest in doing a regular
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physical
activity which made up 43. 1.

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Men
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show
a considerable fall in interest in
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physical
performance by the age of 25 to 44, accounting for
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only
42. 2 and 39. 5 percent.
On the other hand
,
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females
participating in
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physical
exercises increase from 25 to 64, with values rising from 48. 9 to 53 percent. The rate of participation of
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females
and males represents no significant difference and consume almost the same percentage, with about 46. 7 and 47. 1
respectively
.
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