Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

graph of the number of people going to school

graph of the number of people going to school jVn6X
The percentage of newly graduated students who got a job as an English and French in Ontario teacher every year from 2001 to 2007. -At the beginning, a language or teaching class has a success rate of about 70% in finding a job. Although French teachers are a little less successful with English teachers recruiting for both categories next year by 15% to 55%. -However, In 2003 French teachers started to be more successful in their careers. their job search rather than their English co-teaching their employment rate increased to almost 70% where it was stable with minor changes until 2007 when it rose again to just under 75%.
The percentage of
newly
graduated students who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
a job as an English and French in Ontario
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teacher
every year from 2001 to 2007.

-At the beginning, a language or teaching
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
has a success rate of about 70% in finding a job. Although French
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
are a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
less successful with English
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
recruiting for both categories
next
year by 15% to 55%.

-
However
, In 2003 French
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
to be more successful in their careers.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
their
job search
rather
than their English co-teaching their employment rate increased to almost 70% where it was stable with minor
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
until 2007 when it rose again to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
under 75%.

IELTS academic graph of the number of people going to school

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
109 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • graph of the number of people going to school