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The 0lans belowshow the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

The diagrams illustrate the sports centre of the university at present time and what kind of changes it will undergo in the future. It is clear from the graphs that overall area intended for sport activities will be expanded, with two outdoor courts being replaced by new training halls and shops. In terms of existing layout, we can see that the students enter to sports center, with outdoor courts in both sides, from southern part which lead into a reception. There is a 25m pool in the center of the hall which is surrounded by dressing room in the west, gym in the northern-east and the room where students can rest in the east. The space for reception, 25m pool with resting and fitting rooms on both sides in the redevolped sports centre will remain the same; however, the gym will be extended to eastern side. The number of dressing rooms will increase by two, situating in two corners which can be reached just turning to left or right, passing through shop for sporting facilities or cafe, by the entrence. As regards the outdoor courts, they will be replaced by swimming pool in the west and indoor stadium with two dancing studios in the east.
The diagrams illustrate the
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sports
centre of the university at present time and what kind of
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changes
it will undergo in the future.

It is
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clear
from the graphs that
overall
area intended for
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sport
activities will
be expanded
, with two outdoor courts
being replaced
by new training halls and shops.

In terms of existing layout, we can
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see
that the students enter to
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sports
center, with outdoor courts in both sides, from southern part which lead into a reception. There is a 25m pool in the center of the hall which
is surrounded
by dressing
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room
in the west, gym in the northern-east and the
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room
where students can rest in the east.

The space for reception, 25m pool with resting and fitting
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rooms
on both sides in the redevolped
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sports
centre will remain the same;
however
, the gym will
be extended
to eastern side. The number of dressing
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rooms
will increase by two, situating in two corners which can
be reached
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just
turning to
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left
or right, passing through shop for sporting facilities or cafe, by the entrence. As regards the outdoor courts, they will
be replaced
by swimming pool in the west and indoor stadium with two dancing studios in the east.

IELTS academic The 0lans belowshow the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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