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TEH DIAGRAM BELOW SHOW THE developement of the horse over a period of 40 million years.

TEH DIAGRAM BELOW SHOW THE developement of the horse over a period of 40 million years. 95DYw
The picture portrays the evolution of the horse with foot changing structure over a period of 40 million years. To begin with, in 40 million years ago the horse had five toenails and small tail. However, at that time the horses were look like dogs. After that, it with nominal changes the horses were called as mesohippus in 30 years ago. It replaced with tree toenails. Henceforth, after five years merychippus came with noticeable changed. For example, it had tree toenail but middle one was large in height as well as width as compared to other side of nail. Whilst, in today's contemporary ear, horses are big in size with good shape of tail and body. The most fascinating change happen in foots. The foots are connected each other with three bones where two bones are extremely short and other one is large in size.
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with foot changing structure over a period of 40 million years.

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with, in 40 million years ago the
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horse
had five toenails and
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small
tail.
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, at that time the
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horses
were look like dogs. After that, it with nominal
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changes
the
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were called
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mesohippus
in 30 years ago. It replaced with tree toenails.

Henceforth, after five years
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came with noticeable
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changed
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middle one was
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large in height
as well
as width as compared to other side of nail. Whilst, in
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today
's contemporary ear,
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horses
are
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big in size
with
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good
shape of tail and body. The most fascinating
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change
happen in foots. The foots
are connected
each other with three bones where two bones are
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short and other one is
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large in size
.

IELTS academic TEH DIAGRAM BELOW SHOW THE developement of the horse over a period of 40 million years.

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