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Task 1: The graph above gives information about annual average spending on clothes per person in the US in 1985, 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The graph above gives information about annual average spending on clothes per person in the US in 1985, 1995 and 2005. m8q9d
The given bar chart illustrates the average money spent on clothes per person of American adults and children during the period from 1985 to 2005. Overall, there are two main features that can be seen from this bar chart. First of all, all categories witnessed upward trends in the levels of spending. Additionally, the expenditure of adults on clothes was significantly higher than that of children during the given time frame. It is striking that there was a considerable increase in average yearly spending of adults. In particular, the expenditure of women’s clothing in 1985 and 1995 was around $500 per person and this figure went up remarkably to nearly $700 after 10 years. Similarly, the annually spending figures of men started at $300 per head in 1985 and peaked at about $450 in 1995, before falling slightly to $400 at the end of the period shown. Moving on to the spent on boys’ and girls’ clothes, the figures changed only modestly. While the former rose slightly from $100 in 1985 to $110 per person in 1995 and still remained the same after 10 years, the latter saw a steady increase of approximately $20 per head each decade and finished at around $160 in 2005.
The
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given
bar chart illustrates the average money spent on clothes per person of American adults and children during the period from 1985 to 2005.

Overall
, there are two main features that can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
from this bar chart.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, all categories witnessed upward trends in the levels of spending.
Additionally
, the expenditure of adults on clothes was
significantly
higher than that of children during the
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given
time frame.

It is striking that there was a considerable increase in average yearly spending of adults.
In particular
, the expenditure of women’s clothing in 1985 and 1995 was around $500 per person and this figure went up
remarkably
to
nearly
$700 after 10 years.
Similarly
, the
annually
spending figures of
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men
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started
at $300 per head in 1985 and peaked at about $450 in 1995,
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before
falling
slightly
to $400 at the
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end
of the period shown.

Moving on to the spent on boys’ and girls’ clothes, the figures
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changed
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only
modestly
. While the former rose
slightly
from $100 in 1985 to $110 per person in 1995 and
still
remained the same after 10 years, the latter
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saw
a steady increase of approximately $20 per head each decade and finished at around $160 in 2005.
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IELTS academic Task 1: The graph above gives information about annual average spending on clothes per person in the US in 1985, 1995 and 2005.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
205 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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