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Stages in the development of cooking equipment

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The rendered diagram depicts the information about various stages in the process of improvement of cooking equipments. It is a simple and clear representation. Overall, it is evident that it is a three staged process in which simple cooking utensil is reformed into complex cooking tool. To embark with, the earliest stage included just a pot kept over dry grass twigs and fire direclty. Moving further, in second stage an improvement with little change took place, in which coal was kept in clay shielded spherical vessel and ignition was applied from hole in base. Further to this, in final developmental stage, a well designed equipment was made using multiple tools. A metal base was present with door at front to remove ash amd for air-exchange. This new utensil also contained a handle for easy transportation. Charcoal was used as fuel. Clay lining was presemt inside. Also a support for landing pot was present.

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stages
 in the process of improvement of cooking equipments. It is a simple and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 representation. Overall
, it is evident that it is a Make sure that the adjective 'three' is correct. Possibly, it should be an adverb (typically ~ly) that modifies 'staged'. Possibly, it should be the first word in a compound adjective (hyphenated adjective). Possibly, it is correct.
three staged
 process in which simple cooking utensil is reformed
 into complex cooking tool. To embark with, the earliest You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstandinglegpointstepmomentphase
stage
 included This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 a pot This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retained
kept
 over dry grass twigs and fire Possible spelling mistake found.directly
direclty
. Moving further
, in second You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstandinglegpointstepmomentphase
stage
 an improvement with This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
little
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
 took place, in which coal was This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retained
kept
 in clay shielded spherical vessel and ignition was applied
 from hole in base. Further
 to this, in final developmental You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstandinglegpointstepmomentphase
stage
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a well designed equipment
was made
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 for air-exchange. This new utensil also
 contained a handle for easy transportation. Charcoal was This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 as fuel. Clay lining was Possible spelling mistake found.presentpreset
presemt
 inside. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Also,
Also
 a support for landing pot was present. 