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Southland's main exports and future projections

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The graph shows us rough data on the money earned from export products of Southland in the years 2000 and 2021. Moreover, it tells us about the economic plans regarding these products for the year 2025. First of all, it can be observed that Southland’s income from international tourism increased by an amount of only one billion in the past 21 years. Therefore, they seem to have planned to earn around 10 billion by 2025. Regarding dairy products, the exportation of these items had an impressive growth, from 7 billion to 10 billions. However, the project is to adjust the income through reducing it by half a billion. Turning to the trade of meat products, it is clear that they received the lowest amount of money from it. Even so, it seems that they are shrinking the amount little by little so that by 2025, this business would earn them less than 5 billions. In conclusion, Southland is making a constructive marketing plan by focusing on tourism and dairy products while bringing down the amount of meat exported.
The graph
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us rough data on the money earned from export
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products
of Southland in the years 2000 and 2021.
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us about the economic plans regarding these
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products
for the year 2025.

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that Southland’s income from international tourism increased by an
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of
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in the past 21 years.
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, they seem to have planned to earn around 10
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billion
by 2025.

Regarding dairy
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products
, the exportation of these items had an impressive growth, from 7
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billion
to 10
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billions
.
However
, the project is to adjust the income through reducing it by half a billion.

Turning to the trade of meat
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products
, it is
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that they received the lowest
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amount
of money from it. Even
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, it seems that they are shrinking the
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amount
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by
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little
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that by 2025, this business would earn them less than 5 billions.

In conclusion
, Southland is making a constructive marketing plan by focusing on tourism and dairy
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products
while bringing down the
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of meat exported.

IELTS academic Southland's main exports and future projections

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178 words
6.0
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