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Some people think that students should aquire work experience during their gap year instead of travelling.Do you agree or disagree

Some people think that students should aquire work experience during their gap year instead of travelling. Pky2p

It is being opined by fewer people that work experience should be gained by learners rather than visiting outside the country in their gap year. I entirely agree with the given statement and hash out my views in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, obtaining experience regarding work during vacations will be contribute to aquire jobs for students. The reason for this is nowadays companies focus on experience of workers in order to select effective employees. Thus, after getting knowledge about work, they can easily hire work in any company. However, travelling in foreign nations required their valuable time which must be spent on working in industry in order to bright their future. Besides this, students also can enhance their precious qualities during gaining experience. This is because when they work under the staff, this teachs the value of discipline. Apart from this, spending time with working group members also instill leadership skill in their mind. Hence, having information regarding valuable qualities will be help puplis to survive not only on workplace, but also in this competitive world. For instance, had one of my elder cousin not worked in reliance company during holidays, he would not have experience to join clerk job in the same company. To conclude, after giving viewpoints it is crystal clear that investing time to gather work related experience has benefits to students as compared to travelling as it will not only increase their job capabilities, but also offer numerous essential qualities.

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