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Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views, and give your own opinion.

Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. OQp7
sports are very beneficial for us to maintain physical strength. some people are think playing team sports is better than individuals sports games. and some other people think differently those are believed individuals sports games are better than team sports games. we are discussing both the view one by one. Firstly, we discuss why taking part in team sports games is better; because we learn team spirit and teamwork which is very beneficial for us. teamwork is useful in our life and learns many things from the other team members. In team games, all players are inspired by other team members and get motivated. Also in teamwork communication skills and cooperation are increased step by step. they are improved performance by analyzed other players. those are sharing an experience and some tips which are improved performance and also winning games. for example, ms dhoni (captain of the Indian cricket team) shares an experience and some tips for the match in team players. they supporting to their team and get motivated. which helpful to win a game. On another view, take part in individual games which is better because winning game credit is directly given to the player. In team sports game-winning credit is given to whole teams. Individual sports players are having more names and frames compare to team players. Individual players are managed time table regularly and easy to manage. If the game is lost so no one blaming to others because everything is on the player's confidence and strength. And in training, the player is to choose a suitable time. The individual game has relaxation and no external factors are disturbed. In my opinion, both individual sport games and team sports games are equally good. but both have pros and cons so in my view all have an individual choice for taking part in sports.
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beneficial for us to maintain physical strength.
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and
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are discussing both the view one by one.

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, we discuss why taking part in
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we learn
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spirit and teamwork which is
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beneficial for us. teamwork is useful in our life and learns
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things from the
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members. In
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, all
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are inspired
by
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members and
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and cooperation
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performance by analyzed
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tips which are
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performance and
also
winning
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dhoni
(captain of the Indian cricket
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shares an experience and
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tips for the match in
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helpful to win a game.

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winning game credit is
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game-winning credit is
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are having more names and frames compare to
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no one blaming to others
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everything is on the player's confidence and strength. And in training, the
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player
is to choose a suitable time. The
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game has relaxation and no external factors
are disturbed
.

In my opinion, both
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both have pros and cons
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in my view all have an
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choice for taking part in
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IELTS academic Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better.

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