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The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007

The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007 PY9K
The illustrated bar graph below depicts the time spent per week of young people per week on doing seven activities from 2002 to 2007 in Chester. Overall, there is a noticeable decreased on entirely activities over a given period of time whereas watching television was one of the major activities that these youngsters spent most of their time. Furthermore, teenagers who are living in Chester spent 25 hours per week watching television in 2002 and 2003 while it increases the following year to 30 hours and reached just over 35 hours by the year 2005, 2006 and 2007. However, Young people consumed just over 5 hours and under 10 hours going to pubs /discos and doing some errands for their shopping spree in the year 2002 until 2005 wherein 2007 it peaks to more than 15 hours. Bowling was their least favorite activities of the teenagers, they spent just under 5 hours in 6 years while watching DVDs shows a shift trend from 10 hours in 2002 it uplift just under 20 hours and declined again by 10 hours in the final year.
The illustrated bar graph below depicts the time
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from 2002 to 2007 in Chester.

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period of time whereas watching television was one of the major
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that these youngsters
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25
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per week watching television in 2002 and 2003 while it increases the following
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to 30
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and reached
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over 35
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by the
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2005, 2006 and 2007.
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consumed
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and under 10
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going to pubs /discos and doing
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errands for their shopping spree in the
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2002 until 2005 wherein 2007 it peaks to more than 15 hours.

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under 5
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in 6 years while watching DVDs
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a shift trend from 10
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and declined again by 10
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007

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