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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, However think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, However think that change is always a good thing. 2Jpj
With the top-notch efforts by humans have made it possible to do many impossible tasks such as landing on mars. All of this extraordinary work is possible due to the mindset of changing. Here, The group of people are in favor of transforming while others neglect the change and prefer to be stagnate. In my opinion, Change will always bring extra opportunities to the table while doing nothing will make the life more easier but the end will be catastrophic. The point where the majority of humans deny to change is the fear about loosing the current position they have. For example, In past, Nokia was the dominant leader in the smartphone industry but when the advance technology arrived, Nokia didn’t moved with time and faced awful failure. The people who really believe in switching gets the advantage of improved life as well as personality. For instance, Currently world’s richest man, Elon musk has seen the countless failures, He failed in PayPal then he invested in tesla motors which was also about to bankrupt but still what he did was, Never gave up and Just changed the page of life. Another shining reason behind applying the change in life is that, Individual will get the benefit of meeting new people, New people means new experience. Which will absolutely help to grow the inner confidence and boost the communication skill. In conclusion, I want to add that, People who really want to achieve something in life, will definitely apply the change and others will not move even after the god will insist them.
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mars
. All of this extraordinary work is possible due to the mindset of changing. Here, The group of
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people
are in favor of transforming while others neglect the
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change
and prefer to be
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stagnate
. In my opinion,
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Change
will always bring extra opportunities to the table while doing nothing will
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make
the
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life
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more easier
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but
the
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end
will be catastrophic.

The point where the majority of humans deny to
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change
is the fear about
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loosing the
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current
position they have.
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,
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In past
, Nokia was the dominant leader in the smartphone industry
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but
when the advance technology arrived, Nokia didn’t
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moved
with time and faced awful failure.

The
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people
who
really
believe in switching
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gets
the advantage of
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improved
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life
as well
as personality.
For instance
,
Currently
world’s richest
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man
,
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Elon musk
has
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seen
the countless failures, He failed in PayPal then he invested in tesla motors which was
also
about to bankrupt
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but
still
what he did was, Never gave up and
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Just
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changed
the page of life.

Another shining reason behind applying the
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change
in
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life
is that, Individual will
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get
the benefit of meeting new
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people
, New
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people
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means
new experience. Which will
absolutely
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help
to grow the inner confidence and boost the communication
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skill
.

In conclusion
, I want to
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add
that,
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People
who
really
want to achieve something in
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life
, will definitely apply the
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change
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and others
will not
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move
even after the god will insist them.
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IELTS academic Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, However think that change is always a good thing.

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