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The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010

The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010 GE1o
The graphs illustrates the percentage of people who owned a computer based off population between the year of 2002 and 2010 as well as based off education for the year 2002 and 2010. As shown by the graphs, the percentage of population who possess a computer remains in a stable rise all throughout the years whereas the data based off education level has a significant difference between the years. In more detail, the population that owns a computer in 2002 is around 40 to 60 percent and followed by the year 2004 with 60 percent, 2006 with around 60 to 80 percent, and lastly the year 2010 with almost 80 percent of the population. Ownership of computer based off education level shows a high difference with students without high school diploma with 15 percent in 2002 going up to 40 percent in 2010, high school graduates with 35 percent in 2002 rising tp 65 percent in 2010, in complete college students with 50 percent in 2002 then fluctuates to 80 percent in 2010, etc.
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of 2002 and 2010
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2002 and 2010.

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education level has a significant difference between the years.

In more detail, the population that
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a computer in 2002 is around 40 to 60
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and followed by the
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2004 with 60
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, 2006 with around 60 to 80
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2010 with almost 80
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Ownership of computer based
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education level
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a high difference with students without high school diploma with 15
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in 2002 going up to 40
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in 2010, high school graduates with 35
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in 2002 rising
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in 2010, in complete college students with 50
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in 2002 then fluctuates to 80
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IELTS academic The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010

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