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Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. While others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. v.4

Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. While others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. v. 4
There is a growing tendency among manufacturers to present their products in excess packaging and supermarkets exhibit them to attract customers, who are often lured by such products. In order to reduce the amount of packaging, all the parties involved in creating such a trend should make a joint effort in this direction. Since many people today equate quality with superior packaging, companies would not often take the risk of reducing it for fear of losing their market share. However, branded companies that are already established in the market can experiment with simple covering, without the fear of losing the popularity of their products. But it has to be done with wide publicity through the media and the financial benefits should be passed on to customers, or else, it could sometime become counter productive. For example, multinational companies like ‘Colgate’ can successfully give up expensive packaging of their toothpastes with economical alternatives. Similarly, customers also have a role to play, by showing greater interest towards items in simple packing. This would motivate increasing number of producers to pack their products using inexpensive materials. Super markets would also be encouraged to showcase such products with greater visibility. On the other hand, the amount of packaging also indicates the need to ensure the durability, safety and freshness of products. For instance, most instant foods are packed in several layers using expensive materials like aluminium foil and superior plastic, with the purpose of longer shelf life. Hence, lighter packaging of products should be introduced only after taking these aspects into consideration. In conclusion, manufacturers, supermarkets and customers have a collective role in reducing the amount of packaging of products.
There is a growing tendency among manufacturers to present their
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products
in excess
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packaging
and supermarkets exhibit them to attract
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customers
, who are
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often
lured by such
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products
. In order to
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reduce
the amount of
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packaging
, all the parties involved in creating such a trend should
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make
a joint effort in this direction.

Since
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many
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people
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today
equate quality with superior
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packaging
,
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companies
would not
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often
take the
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risk
of reducing it for fear of losing their market share.
However
, branded
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companies
that are already established in the market can experiment with simple covering, without the fear of losing the popularity of their
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products
.
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But
it
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has to
be done
with wide publicity through the media and the financial benefits should
be passed
on to
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customers
, or else, it could sometime become
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counter productive
.
For example
, multinational
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companies
like ‘Colgate’ can
successfully
give up expensive
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packaging
of their toothpastes with economical alternatives.

Similarly
,
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customers
also
have a role to play, by showing greater interest towards items in simple packing. This would motivate increasing number of producers to pack their
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products
using inexpensive materials. Super markets would
also
be encouraged
to showcase such
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products
with greater visibility.

On the other hand
, the amount of
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packaging
also
indicates the need to ensure the durability, safety and freshness of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
.
For instance
, most instant foods
are packed
in several layers using expensive materials like
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aluminium
foil and superior plastic, with the purpose of longer shelf life.
Hence
, lighter
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packaging
of
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products
should
be introduced
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only
after taking these aspects into consideration.

In conclusion
, manufacturers, supermarkets and
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customers
have a collective role in reducing the amount of
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packaging
of
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products
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS academic Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. While others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. v. 4

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
276 words
6.0
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