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Some people believe that if a police officer carries guns, it can encourage a higher level of violence. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The given table illustrates the information about people who spent money in different sectors in 5 countries. It is obvious that majority of people spent money in Housing sector in UK that is 37% whereas in France, only 7% people spent money in clothing. We can observe that in France, most of the people are interested in food and drink and 13% people spent their money in entertainment sector and in housing sector it is 31%. In Germany majority of people bought house that is 33% and 22% people like to spent money in food sector which is 3% less than France’s food sector. Compared to all countries, Turkey’s people spent the highest amount of money in food sector and only 10% spent in entertainment which is the lowest number of this sector. Lastly, in Spain 8% of people spend money in clothing whereas 18% people spend in housing which is the lowest number of people in this sector.
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IELTS academic Some people believe that if a police officer carries guns, it can encourage a higher level of violence.

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
159 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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