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Some people believe that children arw given too much free time.They feel that this time should be used to do more school work

Some people believe that children arw given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work VP1WQ
Number of human beings think that children have too much leisure tine therefore they wish that children should do more school homework in this time. From the beginning of our lives we are llearning in every second. there is a rat race in modern children fromgrade one to secondary education is the fact wich can rise us as a considerable important man for this modern society and there is no doubt about that but doing school homeworks is not the only way for nake children as a strong person. children who are spend their leisure time to do extracurricular activities, hobbies and whatever they want. because sometimes those things make more experiences and knowledge than books for example children who haven't leisure time to do things except school works will fail in commiunication with other people, lose their physical abilities in outdoor activities and they couldn't handle situations in outer world. On the other hand doing other activities are really important as well as school education and school works for their brain development. That is a scientifically proved fact all over the world. In sri lanka students have considerable leisure time to do activities with their eeducational process. Most of children interest in doing sports, join commiunities, do some hobbies for make a refresh on their student life. This method is following by many countries to make more fruitful person for their country. They know that there is no effective results to only focusing for school works. To recapitulate doing school works in leisure time is not a effective thing for children. people should be guide their children to spend their leisure time more eeffectively.
Number of human beings
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that
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children
have too much
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leisure
tine
therefore
they wish that
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children
should do more
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school
homework in this time.

From the beginning of our
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we are
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llearning
in every second.
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there
is a rat race in modern
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children
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fromgrade
one to secondary education is the fact
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wich
can rise us as a considerable
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important
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man
for this modern society and there is no doubt about that
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but
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doing
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school
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homeworks
is not the
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only
way for
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nake
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children
as a strong person.
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children
who are
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spend
their
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leisure
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time
to do extracurricular
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activities
, hobbies and whatever they want.
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because
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sometimes
those things
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make
more experiences and knowledge than books
for example
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children
who haven't
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leisure
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time
to do things except
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school
works will fail in
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commiunication
with other
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people
, lose their physical abilities in outdoor
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activities and
they couldn't handle situations in outer world.

On the other hand
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doing
other
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activities
are
really
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important
as well
as
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school
education and
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school
works for their brain development.
That is
a
scientifically
proved fact all over the world. In
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sri lanka
students have considerable
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leisure
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time
to do
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activities
with their
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eeducational
process. Most of
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children
interest in
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doing
sports,
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join
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commiunities
, do
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some
hobbies for
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make
a refresh on their student life. This method is following by
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many
countries to
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make
more fruitful person for their country. They know that there is no effective results to
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only
focusing for
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school
works.

To recapitulate
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doing
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school
works in
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leisure
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time
is not
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a
effective thing for
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children
.
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people
should be
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guide
their
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children
to spend their
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leisure
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time
more
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eeffectively
.
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IELTS academic Some people believe that children arw given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work

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275 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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