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salary is more important than career

salary is more important than career Q5m71

These days, salary is enrolling a significant role in our life. so some people think that a wang is more important than career while other believe that a job is more vital. In this essay, I will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion. On the one hand, having a better life so you can provide a physical need such as home, clothes, food and drink with many needs. For example, people in middle class can provide many things to their wife, children and parents. so that why some think that salary is become in first class of any jobs. On the other hand, feeling more satisfaction about yourself because naturally as a person you can create and work more when you do something you love it. to illustrate person can enrolment in many courses to develop his or her personality like leadership course or managing or planning course. Hence that believe that a good job for good self-estimate. In addition, becoming a happiness person because that reflected in your performance. According to many Studies and research which proved the good work condition reflected in the employers which Increases employee productivity twice. For an instance from my own experience through when I was working at a factory for making plates you that I love very much and I always work overtime because I want to spend a lot of time there in that workshop In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both point views, I strongly believe that a career is more critical than salary because you can increased by working more time or bonus points

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