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The first flow chart demonstrates the process of the cement-making with use of different stages and equipment. The second illustrates to produce concrete for manufacturing purposes is used by cement. In the cement production process, First of all, Limestone and clay are basic requirements. They added in a crusher for making powder from it. The powder goes to the mixer. it also goes to the heater which is rotating due to heat. After that, the mixture goes to the grinder for being cement. Then, cement is filled into bags. In concrete production, The concrete mixer is filled from the half fraction of gravel, which means small stones, a quarter of sand includes in it, a minority proportion of cement adds in, also add some water almost one in ten fractions in this process. Later on, this equipment rotates from right to left direction. Overall, It was observed that cement production involves a total of four apparatus, whereas, in concrete production use, only one utensil named a concrete mixer.
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stages and equipment. The second illustrates to produce concrete for manufacturing purposes is
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In the
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, Limestone and clay are basic requirements. They
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in a crusher for making powder from it. The powder goes to the mixer.
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it
also
goes to the heater which is rotating due to heat. After that, the mixture goes to the grinder for being
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cement
. Then,
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is filled
into bags.

In concrete
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production
, The concrete mixer
is filled
from the half fraction of gravel, which means
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small
stones, a quarter of sand includes in it, a minority proportion of
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cement
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adds
in,
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water almost one in ten fractions in this process. Later on, this equipment rotates from right to
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left
direction.

Overall
, It
was observed
that
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cement
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production
involves a total of four apparatus, whereas, in concrete
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production
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,
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one utensil named a concrete mixer.
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IELTS academic rtyu bghf vgftyu bhjjnk nmkjhbg zsawe

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