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The bar diagram shows the transport preferences among young people.

The bar diagram shows the transport preferences among young people. j81N8
The bar diagram illustrates the proportion of young pupils of four different nations who have transport preferences in terms of car, motorcycle and bicycle in a year. Overall, it is apparent from the chart that all the country except France show the highest number of teenagers preferring car among three moded of transportation, whereas To commence with car and motorcycle, 60% of UK citizens are interested in using cars which is more than the ratio of masses in Italy by a little over 10%. Similarly, the US accounted for the same percentage (60%). The lowest figure can be seen for France with only less than the two quarters that is 40%. Focusing on the motorcycle, the UK, France and Italy are accounted for the equal percentage (10%). However, France is the only country with large majority of people using motorcycles. Regarding with the bicycle, just over 40 % of adolescents are keen to travel by bicycle which is 3 times higher than the US and Italy.
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nations who have transport preferences in terms of
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, motorcycle and bicycle in a year.

Overall
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the highest number of
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teenagers
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of transportation, whereas

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and motorcycle, 60% of UK citizens
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over 10%.
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over 40 % of adolescents are keen to travel by bicycle which is 3 times higher than the US and Italy.
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