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Respond to the task by writing three pagagraphs about the solutions to the city's traffic problems, explaining the reason for each solution and its disadvantages. Then write a conclusion, including your personal opinion

Respond to the task by writing three pagagraphs about the solutions to the city's traffic problems, explaining the reason for each solution and its disadvantages. Then write a conclusion, including your personal opinion xa7rb
The picture above is a map of the population of city A. We have all found the solutions and the causes of those consequences. This essay will discuss it in more detail. Firstly, I think traffic is a big problem in this city. Rush hour is 7 to 8 o'clock in the morning, when workers and people pour into the streets leading to heavy congestion. Moreover, the means of transport here are only buses, inherently buses will not be comfortable with other means of transport because through the stops, the bus stops to pick up passengers. I think, to solve this traffic problem is quite simple, the local management needs to allow other vehicles such as motorbikes, family cars, etc. circulate. Secondly, the map shows that residential areas and workplaces such as schools, companies are quite far apart. The population is concentrated on an area on the right hand side and factories and companies are concentrated on the left hand side. This makes commuting every day to work very difficult, they have to cross a bridge, causing everything to be delayed quite a bit. In my opinion, the authorities should have specific solutions to quickly rebuild, making the movement of people convenient. The third problem, as mentioned above, the position of the bridge is not reasonable because it prevents the speed of people when it's rush hour. People travel by bus - always have to keep a moderate speed to avoid an accident that the bridge is quite long. Overall, the main problem in this city is traffic, which is caused by factors such as the design of the residential area and the bridge. I would say that we should
The picture above is a map of the population of city A. We have all found the solutions and the causes of those consequences. This essay will discuss it in more detail.

Firstly
, I
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think
traffic is a
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big
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problem
in this city. Rush hour is 7 to 8 o'clock in the morning, when workers and
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people
pour into the streets leading to heavy congestion.
Moreover
, the means of transport here are
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only
buses,
inherently
buses will not be comfortable with other means of transport
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because
through the
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stops
, the bus
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stops
to pick up passengers. I
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think
, to solve this traffic
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problem
is
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quite
simple, the local management needs to
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allow
other vehicles such as motorbikes, family cars, etc. circulate.

Secondly
, the map
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shows
that residential areas and workplaces such as schools,
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companies
are
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quite
far apart. The population
is concentrated
on an area on the
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right hand
side and factories and
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companies
are concentrated
on the
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left hand
side.
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This
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makes
commuting every day to work
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very
difficult, they
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have to
cross a
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bridge
, causing everything to
be delayed
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quite
a bit. In my opinion, the authorities should have specific solutions to
quickly
rebuild, making the movement of
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people
convenient.

The third
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problem
, as mentioned above, the position of the
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bridge
is not reasonable
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because
it
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prevents
the speed of
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people
when it's rush hour.
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People
travel by bus
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-
always
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have to
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keep
a moderate speed to avoid an accident that the
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bridge
is
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quite
long.

Overall
, the main
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problem
in this city is traffic, which
is caused
by factors such as the design of the residential area and the
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bridge
. I would say that we
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should
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IELTS academic Respond to the task by writing three pagagraphs about the solutions to the city's traffic problems, explaining the reason for each solution and its disadvantages. Then write a conclusion, including your personal opinion

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5 paragraphs
279 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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