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Rented and owned apartment in the Britain and Wales between 1913 to 2011

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The bar chart illustrates the number of families measured in percentage living in either a personal or leased apartment in the UK and Wales for a period of 93 years. Overall, it can be seen that this that Live in rented accommodation maintained a gradual decrease while this living in owned apartment maintained a downward trend till the end of the period when there was a change. 1918 had the highest percentage of more than 70% of the total population living in a rented house when compared to families in owned homes making up 22%. There was a significant decrease in the number staying in the leased homes to 68% in 1939 and this was maintained till 1953 at the same rate. However, in 1971 families living in private and leased apartment made up 50%. Households in owned apartment experienced a significant increase to 60% in 1981. Whereas, persons in the rented homes had a fall of 10% decrease in same year. However, towards the end of the period in 2011, there was a gradual decrease to 62% ok n rented apartment in contrast to an increase in owned apartment to 35%.
The bar chart illustrates the number of families measured in percentage
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living
in either a personal or leased
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apartment
in the UK and Wales for a period of 93 years.
Overall
, it can be
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seen
that this that
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Live
in rented accommodation maintained a gradual
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decrease
while this
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living
in
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owned
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apartment
maintained a downward trend till the
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end
of the period when there was a
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change
.

1918 had the highest percentage of more than 70% of the total population
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living
in a rented
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house
when compared to families in
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owned
homes making up 22%. There was a significant
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decrease
in the number staying in the leased homes to 68% in 1939 and this
was maintained
till 1953 at the same rate.
However
, in 1971 families
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living
in private and leased
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apartment
made up 50%.

Households in
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owned
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apartment
experienced a significant increase to 60% in 1981.
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Whereas
, persons in the rented homes had a fall of 10%
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decrease
in same year.
However
, towards the
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end
of the period in 2011, there was a gradual
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decrease
to 62% ok n rented
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apartment
in contrast
to an increase in
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owned
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apartment
to 35%.
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IELTS academic Rented and owned apartment in the Britain and Wales between 1913 to 2011

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3 paragraphs
192 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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