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Over the past 40 years, the rate of smoking between men and women is mentioned in the below line chart. Overall, the population of men in the year 1960 were smoking 6 times more than the women whereas, in the year 2000 the men and women who smoke are approximately equal. As we can see, the population of men who smoke has gradually decreased from an astounding 600 per 1000 people to approximately 200 per 1000 in the last 40 years. However, the change was very gradual until 1985 then there was a steep decline in the smokers who were men. Whereas, the population of women who smoke was gradually increasing from the year 1960 to 1965. However, there is a slight decline from the year 1975 to 2000. It was at a constant number from the year 1975 to 1980 and there was little to no change in the year 1995 to 2000.
Over the past 40 years, the rate of smoking between
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and
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is mentioned
in the below line chart.

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, the population of
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men
in the
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year
1960 were smoking 6 times more than the
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women
whereas, in the
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2000 the
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and
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women
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smoke are approximately equal.

As we can
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, the population of
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smoke has
gradually
decreased from an astounding 600 per 1000
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people
to approximately 200 per 1000 in the last 40 years.
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, the
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was
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gradual until 1985 then there was a steep decline in the smokers
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were
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Whereas
, the population of
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women
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smoke was
gradually
increasing from the
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1960 to 1965.
However
, there is a slight decline from the
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year
1975 to 2000. It was at a constant number from the
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1975 to 1980 and there was
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to no
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in the
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1995 to 2000.

IELTS academic rate of men and women who smoke

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