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The bar chart gives us information on various digital games like mobile phone games, online games, console games and handheld games sold globally during the year 2000 to 2006.

The bar chart gives us information on various digital games like mobile phone games, online games, console games and handheld games sold globally during the year 2000 to 2006. bDBm6
The bar chart gives us information on various digital games like mobile phone games, online games, console games and handheld games sold globally during the year 2000 to 2006. Overall, it is inferred that handheld games was introduced in 2000 where it gained mass buyers and till 2006 it remained to be a top contender in terms of sales reaching to a volume of $18 billion in 2006. Whereas, the amount of console games that were sold around the world decreased consecutively till 2006 ($3 billion). In the beginning, we can see that sales for mobile games are almost as non-existent in 2000 however we do see that the amount online games sold was accounted for $2 billion initially. In 2001, both the games sold was proportioned equally wherein we see a rise of mobile games resulting in $2. 5 billion. Both these games were again purchased equally in 2004 then we saw a decline in online games. During the year, it is quite surprising to see mobile games surpassing online games by a staggering rate of $8 billion.
The bar chart gives us information on various digital
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like mobile phone
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,
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online
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games
, console
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games
and handheld
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sold globally during the year 2000 to 2006.
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, it
is inferred
that handheld
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games
was introduced
in 2000 where it gained mass buyers and till 2006 it remained to be a top contender in terms of sales reaching to a volume of $18
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billion
in 2006.
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, the amount of console
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that
were sold
around the world decreased
consecutively
till 2006 ($3 billion).

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see
that sales for mobile
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are almost as non-existent in 2000
however
we do
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see
that the amount
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online
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sold
was accounted
for $2
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initially
. In 2001, both the
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sold
was proportioned
equally
wherein we
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a rise of mobile
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resulting in $2. 5
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billion
. Both these
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games
were again
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purchased
equally
in 2004 then we
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saw
a decline in
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online
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. During the year, it is quite surprising to
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mobile
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surpassing
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by a staggering rate of $8
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.
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IELTS academic The bar chart gives us information on various digital games like mobile phone games, online games, console games and handheld games sold globally during the year 2000 to 2006.

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