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The bar graph illustrates the proportion of men, women and children who consumed fruits and vegetables per day for about 8 years in the United Kingdom.

The bar graph illustrates the proportion of men, women and children who consumed fruits and vegetables per day for about 8 years in the United Kingdom. VQb0K
Overall, it can be concluded that the highest percentage of people consuming fruits and vegetables were women, and children accounted for at a very low proportion. Moreover, it can be seen that there was a significant rise in the volume of people eating these food items throughout the given years. The percentage of women eating fruits and vegetables initially was over just 20% in 2001. Then we see a surge in the figure from 20% to 35% in 2004, but not before facing a decline of 5% in 2008. To further summarize about the men and children of Britain, it is observed that the rate of the consumption was stagnant and equal during the first three years (12% and 15%) till 2003 wherein the figures saw a steady rise in men reaching to 27% in 2006 and 2007 (28%) but not before dropping to 24% in 2008 indicating a decline in the previous figures. A similar rise was seen for children 27% in 2006 which further dipped to 24% in the final year.
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people
consuming fruits and vegetables were women, and children accounted for at a
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very
low proportion.
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, it can be
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seen
that there was a significant rise in the volume of
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people
eating these food items throughout the
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given
years.

The percentage of women eating fruits and vegetables
initially
was over
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just
20% in 2001. Then we
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see
a surge in the figure from 20% to 35% in 2004,
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but
not
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before
facing a decline of 5% in 2008.

To
further
summarize about the
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men
and children of Britain, it
is observed
that the rate of the consumption was stagnant and equal during the
first
three years (12% and 15%) till 2003 wherein the figures
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saw
a steady rise in
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men
reaching to 27% in 2006 and 2007 (28%)
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but
not
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before
dropping to 24% in 2008 indicating a decline in the previous figures. A similar rise was
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seen
for children 27% in 2006 which
further
dipped to 24% in the final year.
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IELTS academic The bar graph illustrates the proportion of men, women and children who consumed fruits and vegetables per day for about 8 years in the United Kingdom.

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