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The pie chats illustrate the proportions of sale products in various types. Overall, a major change was expected in what people spend money in in 2014. In 2012, other products is the most common bought of people with surprisingly 82%, but after 2 years, these products is replaced with computer game and tablet products. There was an over 4 times increased in the number of tablets sale from 8% to 34% after the time shown in the charts. The same goes for computer game products with roughly quadrupled from 10% to 41% leading it the main selling products in 2014. Other products was the only line that got decreased in the sale point. A dramatic drop of rate witnessed after 2 years to 25%, over one-third of 2012. In brief, the other tools was replaced by the modern technology.
The pie chats illustrate the proportions of sale
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after 2 years, these
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There was an over 4 times increased in the number of tablets sale from 8% to 34% after the time shown in the charts. The same goes for computer game
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products
with roughly quadrupled from 10% to 41% leading it the main selling
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in 2014.

Other
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, the other tools
was replaced
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IELTS academic proportions of sale products in various types.

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